Wrapping up!

[tsukinofaerii]

LIFE! I can pretend to have it! Or something that almost resembles it! \o/

In other words, I finished the rough draft. :D It clocks out at roughly 53k. I honestly thought there would be more to it, but then it just sort of went "okay, done!" and that was that. What, you wanted exacts? Okay, exactly 53,253 words, so I wrote 2,983 words tying this mess up. And then immediately lost about 500 words going back and removing the bits I had highlighted for Do Not Want. I still have some things left to do before setting it aside to simmer for a while. It doesn't feel like I started it a few weeks ago. @.@ Today I mostly fleshed out a few scenes, changed some details that honestly I will only ever care about and removed a shiny vampire power that I consistently forgot about except when I didn't. The only things I really have to do are touch up Pepper's character (it's a little inconsistent), double check some details (damnit Google Maps, be useful!), and systematically wipe out all traces of contractions from my Main Female Villain's dialogue. I may (may) add in a villain wrap up scene; I can't decide if it needs one or not. Eep! And I'm a little concerned that the final scene is too... I don't want to say fluffy. Soppy? Maybe. IDK.

It's really, really weird thinking of this as "rough draft done". A tiny little part of my brain keeps flagging me down and going, "Too soon, too soon!" Tomorrow if I finish with the editing I'm going to try and get started on my cap_ironman holiday prompts. (I have to choose, what?! This is hard already!) >.>

Last excerpts, and then it's all to be edited until I'm sure I got all the wrinkles ironed out. D: D: D: And then beta'd. >> I may end up asking around. My usual beta has been terribly quiet. And, again, DC girl. :o ANYWAY. You guys are love. Hugs all around. Thank you for cheering me on! :D

DRAMA. ACTION. STEVE BEING RIDICULOUSLY GR-FACE. I have a feeling this may be melodramatic and cheesy!

Steve pulled his sleeve down. It would help keep pressure on the bite until he could get it bandaged. When he stood, he kept Tony cradled in his arms, glaring at Thor when he made as though he'd take him. "We'll find her later. We need to get Tony somewhere safe before dawn. Someone call transport."

Potts flashed her cellphone, thumb already slapping the keys. Her eyes were locked on Tony, and worry set deep lines in her makeup. She still hadn't put her shoes back on, and she was covered in gore up to the ankles. "I've got it. Just keep him going, Rogers. If he dies again, I'll never forgive you."

Last scene. VERY LAST SCENE. (falls over) The schmoop hurts, I swear, but I couldn't figure out any other way to end it. I think Tony's voice is going to need editing, but in his defense, he's still getting over the whole "coughing up his inner bits" thing, and fully expects Steve to be all serious faced and breaking up. I have no excuse for the abuse of adverbs.

"Do you mind?" Tony frowned back as sternly as he could. "You're blocking my view of the ceiling."

That was the exasperated roll of the eyes he knew so well. Unfortunately, the sarcasm failed. Steve settled down against Tony's chest, practically pinning him down. No weight pushed against him, for which Tony was terribly grateful since his aches were still present, but he blocked him in with chest and arms. If Tony wanted free, he'd have to wiggle for it.

"I think I want to stay here." Steve's face was absolutely solemn. "Your bed is more comfortable than mine."

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[valtyr]

"Sure, Tony, just find a part of my body that isn't sexy, and I'll allow you bite it on other people." Tony is foiled again.

Skin temperature, pulse rate, there's all kind of tests they can do. Ass, inner thigh, lower belly, wrists. For science. He's going to have bitemarks everywhere. Tony will be filled with glee. Steve is actively encouraging him to leave possessive marks all over.

[tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com]

Tony says that he has eternity and a surprising amount of patience. He's only foiled if he gives up. "Here, Steve, I think I need to check you again, the back of your knees are starting to look a little unappealing. I'd better suck on them to make sure."

Not only the biting, but it's also an excuse to string Steve all over with all sorts of monitoring devices and then with the biting. It's like technoporn. I bet he'll go back and listen to Steve's heart rate go from steady to spiked to resting later while watching the graphs move.

[valtyr]

But Tony isn't biting other people, so Steve's gotten what he wanted I guess? And I suspect after being bitten on the back of the neck a few times, with Tony draped over him and humping him, bottoming will start to have more appeal. Everyone wins, I guess.

I bet he'll go back and listen to Steve's heart rate go from steady to spiked to resting later while watching the graphs move.

I just have this image of Steve all :O Are you jerking off to my heartbeat? And Tony is all, it's a very sexy heartbeat.

You should totally write porn of this.

[tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com]

Tony thinks that this is an acceptable compromise, though he's still a bit XP on the bagged blood. He says it tastes stale. But regular noms on Steve will have to do.

Tony's a complete geek, even if Ults Tony manages to hide it behind that suave urbanite exterior. Probably the only thing he thinks is hotter than a naked Steve is a naked Steve hooked up to technology.

You should totally write porn of this.

(covers the plotbunny's sensitive ears) SHH. They'll hear you!

[valtyr]

Well, I guess Tony can afford to hire a nurse and equipment and get the blood decanted right there? It doesn't have to be sitting around for hours or anything. :) And he can always have just a little nibble on Steve afterwards to clear the taste.

Mmm... I dunno. Naked Steve on the hood of his favourite car? Naked Steve snuggling with the Iron Man armour? Tony's an imaginative man, and I don't think he's above gilding the lily.

Dooo eeet!

[tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com]

He probably could. And then Steve can be jealous that Tony's nurse will inevitably be dressed in a tiny little miniskirt and will have supercleavage. Tony's master plan looks something like: 1) Make Steve incredibly possessive. 2) Profit. 3) Repeat step 1.

He has to give it all a try, just so that he can be sure it's good. Sometimes two or three tries just to be safe.

Prompts! Prompts first! and then maybe! >>;;;;;;;