tsukinofaerii: Whosoever findeth this hammer, if she be hot, shall wield the power of the gnarly Thor (*Tony*)
tsukinofaerii ([personal profile] tsukinofaerii) wrote2009-11-16 10:13 pm
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Wrapping up!

LIFE! I can pretend to have it! Or something that almost resembles it! \o/

In other words, I finished the rough draft. :D It clocks out at roughly 53k. I honestly thought there would be more to it, but then it just sort of went "okay, done!" and that was that. What, you wanted exacts? Okay, exactly 53,253 words, so I wrote 2,983 words tying this mess up. And then immediately lost about 500 words going back and removing the bits I had highlighted for Do Not Want. I still have some things left to do before setting it aside to simmer for a while. It doesn't feel like I started it a few weeks ago. @.@ Today I mostly fleshed out a few scenes, changed some details that honestly I will only ever care about and removed a shiny vampire power that I consistently forgot about except when I didn't. The only things I really have to do are touch up Pepper's character (it's a little inconsistent), double check some details (damnit Google Maps, be useful!), and systematically wipe out all traces of contractions from my Main Female Villain's dialogue. I may (may) add in a villain wrap up scene; I can't decide if it needs one or not. Eep! And I'm a little concerned that the final scene is too... I don't want to say fluffy. Soppy? Maybe. IDK.

It's really, really weird thinking of this as "rough draft done". A tiny little part of my brain keeps flagging me down and going, "Too soon, too soon!" Tomorrow if I finish with the editing I'm going to try and get started on my [livejournal.com profile] cap_ironman holiday prompts. (I have to choose, what?! This is hard already!) >.>

Last excerpts, and then it's all to be edited until I'm sure I got all the wrinkles ironed out. D: D: D: And then beta'd. >> I may end up asking around. My usual beta has been terribly quiet. And, again, DC girl. :o ANYWAY. You guys are love. Hugs all around. Thank you for cheering me on! :D

DRAMA. ACTION. STEVE BEING RIDICULOUSLY GR-FACE. I have a feeling this may be melodramatic and cheesy!
Steve pulled his sleeve down. It would help keep pressure on the bite until he could get it bandaged. When he stood, he kept Tony cradled in his arms, glaring at Thor when he made as though he'd take him. "We'll find her later. We need to get Tony somewhere safe before dawn. Someone call transport."

Potts flashed her cellphone, thumb already slapping the keys. Her eyes were locked on Tony, and worry set deep lines in her makeup. She still hadn't put her shoes back on, and she was covered in gore up to the ankles. "I've got it. Just keep him going, Rogers. If he dies again, I'll never forgive you."

Last scene. VERY LAST SCENE. (falls over) The schmoop hurts, I swear, but I couldn't figure out any other way to end it. I think Tony's voice is going to need editing, but in his defense, he's still getting over the whole "coughing up his inner bits" thing, and fully expects Steve to be all serious faced and breaking up. I have no excuse for the abuse of adverbs.
"Do you mind?" Tony frowned back as sternly as he could. "You're blocking my view of the ceiling."

That was the exasperated roll of the eyes he knew so well. Unfortunately, the sarcasm failed. Steve settled down against Tony's chest, practically pinning him down. No weight pushed against him, for which Tony was terribly grateful since his aches were still present, but he blocked him in with chest and arms. If Tony wanted free, he'd have to wiggle for it.

"I think I want to stay here." Steve's face was absolutely solemn. "Your bed is more comfortable than mine."

[identity profile] stormseye.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 04:25 pm (UTC)(link)
You're acting like 616 Tony aren't you? Eating is for normal people. As is sleep and social interaction in times of stress.

Clearly this lack of space for this plot point means sequel right?

Mmmm, Häagen-Dazs.

[identity profile] tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 04:38 pm (UTC)(link)
>> MAYBE I forgot a few meals. I'm good about breakfast (grab food, eat while brushing hair, done), but lunch and dinner were both writing times and *whine*. Work kept me sleeping. Usually. >> Nothing like knowing that you have to answer questions like "what is this blue thing that goes clicky and then takes away my page when I click it" at 8 AM to make you get at least 4 fours.

SHHH. DON'T LET THE PLOT BUNNIES HEAR YOU. I didn't kill my villain. D:

[identity profile] stormseye.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 05:27 pm (UTC)(link)
At least you didn't stress eat ^_^

Ohhh, good thing we are typing, I don't think they can read.

[identity profile] tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 05:33 pm (UTC)(link)
There may be a box of gingerbread cookies in my room, but they're barely touched. (sweatdrop) I have a low resistance to gingerbread.

Yes. (flail) I haven't even recovering from this one yet, and still they gather. >>
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[personal profile] valtyr 2009-11-17 09:51 pm (UTC)(link)
So... sequel where they deal with the villain, Steve deals with possibly not being straight, they experiment with Various Places Tony Can Bite Steve, Steve gives bottoming a try, and they attempt to co-ordinate schedules?

[identity profile] tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 09:57 pm (UTC)(link)
D: I haven't even posted this one yet! (flail)
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[personal profile] valtyr 2009-11-17 09:58 pm (UTC)(link)
Never too early to start queueing up the fics!

[identity profile] tsukinofaerii.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 10:00 pm (UTC)(link)
You're just hoping to get another long Ultimates story out there, aren't you? D: I see what you're planning!
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[personal profile] valtyr 2009-11-17 10:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Hey, now, that's not fair. I will totally settle for a 616 fic. Perhaps one where Tony-as-Iron-Man seduces Steve, which basically involves either Tony staying in the armour and Iron Man using his hands on Steve, or Steve being blindfolded and tied up so Tony can get out of the armour and do his thing without risking his identity.

[identity profile] stormseye.livejournal.com 2009-11-17 10:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Ahh, but can Tony be quiet enough during sex to keep super hearing Steve from recognizing? Or does Steve have to wear ear plugs? Or Tony has to wear his helmet. Which does not seem to sexy for him, no kissing! Or biting, or licking.
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[personal profile] valtyr 2009-11-18 12:07 am (UTC)(link)
Well, Steve has never heard Tony sex noises, so as long Tony keeps it all vague, it should be fine. Or perhaps he builds a voice altering gadget?

[identity profile] stormseye.livejournal.com 2009-11-18 12:18 am (UTC)(link)
Like a ball gag that distorts your sex noises? He can hid it in plain sight.
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[personal profile] valtyr 2009-11-18 10:43 am (UTC)(link)
Well, he doesn't really need to hide it if Cap is blindfolded and tied up I guess? Maybe he just puts on an outrageous Australian accent or something.